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Shameless Plugs Podcast Interview

Shameless Plugs Podcast Interview

I’m happy to announce that I am appearing again on the podcast Shameless Plugs. This time was are talking about NaNoWriMo and Your Novel, This Month. I’m also happy to announce that Your Novel, This Month is now available in print!!! If you haven’t […]

Bad Writing Habits to Eliminate Now

Bad Writing Habits to Eliminate Now

Halloween is a good time to let bad habits die As a fantasy writer, I love all things magical, and recently I have turned that attention into researching Wiccan beliefs. (This is a purely scholarly pursuit, I promise.) One of major the Wiccan holidays is […]

Telling Isn’t Bad

Telling Isn’t Bad

When and where you should tell, don’t show

“Show, don’t tell” is probably the most commonly given advice in writing, but there are places where telling is the right choice.

Why Use Telling?

Telling is a quick, efficient way to relate lots of information to a reader in a short amount of time. It works for writing transitions or other places where you need to move the timeline ahead, or where showing mundane details would bore readers.

But before we dip into the usefulness of this technique, a quick reminder of why telling can be dangerous:

Telling stops your plot’s momentum

Every sentence spent telling your readers about something is time not spent moving the plot along. Imagine meeting someone for the first time over coffee and the entire conversation is her talking about people you have never met and her deepest darkest life experiences? You’d probably think she needs some serious counseling.

Telling creates distance

When readers don’t experience important parts of the character’s story with the character, they feel like they are hearing the story second-hand. Readers want to live the character’s life.

Telling can be boring

Nothing is happening to your character. And no one likes a lecture.

When and where to use telling

First decide if the reader really needs to know the information

Unnecessary information falls into two main categories: backstory and research.


Backstory is a critical piece of building your character, but not all of it is important to the reader, or it isn’t important at the time.

Many editors advise “sprinkling in” these bits of information. I don’t. Sprinkling in random bits of unrelated information just confuses the reader. Like throwing a pack of skittles into your tiramisu. If it isn’t relevant, leave it out. Here’s an example of sprinkled in backstory. See if you can find the telling that works and the telling that doesn’t.

He smiled at me showing his perfect white teeth and handed me the helmet. I took it reluctantly.
“What’s the matter?” he said.
I can’t ride a bike. I haven’t been on one since I was seven. The bike was a gift from my grandmother. She saved for an entire year to get it for me that Christmas.

You can see the exact point where the telling crosses over into information the reader doesn’t need to know. The author may think she is laying the foundation for something significant about the bike later, but the grandmother line is too much. The reader has no connection to the grandmother, and therefore, doesn’t really care.

Research/World Building

Yes, you should do research for your novel. No, you should not dump all your new found knowledge on your unsuspecting reader. If you can’t use the character’s natural vocabulary and cultural norms to leave enough context clues for your reader to understand what is happening, then you may need to drop in a brief explanation.

I peered through the gap in the tent wall uncertain if I should enter. The general sat cross legged on the rug. His prayer beads making tiny clicks as his lips silently moved. The smell the offerings ticked my nose.
But the statue on the altar was Liandra. Why would he be praying to the Goddess of Peace on the eve of battle?

In this example there is no reasonable way to show the reader who the Goddess is. A single sentence of explanation saves the reader pages of showing.

When to use telling

When you come across telling in your manuscript decide if the information is worth keeping or if it should be cut entirely. To keep details off the chopping block, they should meet two conditions:

1. Readers must want to know the information

This can be subjective, but the following questions can help increase reader interest.

Ask: Does the reader have a strong connection to the character?

This is why info dumping at the beginning of a story never works. Readers aren’t connected to the character, and they don’t have the opportunity to make a connection because the character isn’t doing anything but sitting at a table thinking big thinks. So no page 1 sob stories.

Ask: Does the information affect the character in a meaningful way?

In other words, is it relevant to their current conflict? If a character has an arrow sticking out of his chest, that affects the character in a meaningful way. Knowing that the arrow is made of ash wood and eagle feathers really does not.
2. The reader cannot understand what is happening without it

Either the reader must need to know the information for the plot to continue (set-up), or the reader needs to know the information because she would not understand the significance of a current event in the scene (backstory).

Once you have established the information is interesting and relevant we need to decide if telling is the right choice.

Ask: Will showing slow down the pacing?

Showing always takes longer, so if you are trying to tighten a scene, you may need to consider condensing some description.

Ask: Will showing create problems with the narrative focus?

Narrative focus is the story’s ability to stay on topic. Showing every detail (especially if the detail is backstory) will cause your POV character to wander into tangents. Too much of this will make your character seem scattered. (Not to mention drive your reader insane)

Ask: Do I need to quickly establish setting or jump forward in the timeline?

Telling is a well-established technique accomplishing these goals (but more about transitions later)

Some techniques for good telling

1. Back Story (Sneaky telling)

Unless you are willing to resort to a flashback, (which may or may not work) you may have to cheat and sneak it in.

Have your characters argue.

This will move the focus away from the telling and toward the tension between the characters. Something is still happening in the scene, and you get to throw information bombs at your reader.

“Do you have any idea what you are walking into?” That sounded a lot smarter in his head.
She rolled her eyes. “What? It’s a house. One that I’ve been invited to, I might add. And what are you doing here?”
That was a great question. One he wasn’t sure how to explain. “Look, I know what’s in that house, and it’s a little out of a Ghostbuster’s league.”
“Ghostbuster?” She poked a finger into his chest. “Listen, I don’t care what you think of me, but I’ve been doing this for a long time, and I’m perfectly capable of handling myself, and how would you even know why I was here?”
Her head tilted to the side. It wouldn’t take her long to figure it out. “And don’t lie to me, that was you in the shop. Were you spying on me?”
The shop was a little occult bookstore that she ran. Mostly useless trinkets and New Age nonsense, but a few things had surprised him.
“Look, this has nothing to do with you. I’m asking you to walk away,” he said.
She clicked her tongue. “Why should I do anything for you? You left. I don’t owe you anything. Not now, not ever.”

Through the argument we learn that she’s a paranormal investigator, the pair had a previous relationship, and he left her, all without resorting to an info dump.

Another strategy is to drop a one line bombshell. In the following example the author spent an entire chapter showing how much the MC hates “outlanders,” then she closes the chapter with a bombshell.

A shimmery glow that only I could see surrounded the woman. It was blazing red, meaning she was a fire elemental, an Outlander traveler from the realm of Muspelheim.
I skirted around her like the flames I saw could actually burn me. Judging by the frown she gave me, she thought I was a weirdo. I didn’t really care. I just needed to get out of there before I choked on my own hypocrisy.
I feared and distrusted Outlanders. I also was one.

2. Setting/Description

Showing every detail of a setting will drown your readers in description. There is nothing wrong with a few quick sentences at the beginning of a scene to ground your reader in the setting. This will allow the action to start right away without making your readers feel like the character are floating in space.

As Gregor Samsa awoke one morning from uneasy dreams he found himself transformed in his bed into a monstrous vermin.-Kafka

In this sentence we learn several critical pieces of information:

Gregor Samsa just woke up.
He’s in his bed.
He is a giant roach.
He was not a giant roach yesterday.
He does not know why.

I challenge you to rewrite this as showing. I doubt you could do it in less than three pages without confusing the reader and without boring them. Showing is not always the right choice.

3. Transition

While important experiences should be shown to the reader, there are times where you will need to skip meaningless moments in a character’s life. An uneventful car ride is a good example, or all those small actions that don’t impact the story. We know the character has to get dressed in the morning, but we don’t need to see the details. Use a transition.

Fifteen minutes later I was standing outside the principal’s office ready to meet my fate.

This transition lets the reader know how much time has passed and where the character is. Having the character read the time on the clock and then describe the door and the name on the door plate and the secretary typing away at her desk, and blah… would not provide any more meaning to the experience. The short snappy sentence has more impact.

There are plenty of writing advice columns claiming showing is always better than telling, but telling has a place in your story. By learning when to use telling you can strip useless details from your story and put the reader’s experience, not adherence to “rules” as your story’s goal.

Have an experience where telling was better than showing? Let me know in the comments!

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Romancing the Beat-Recommended

Romancing the Beat-Recommended

Romancing the Beat is a road map for aspiring romance writers. This short work by author/editor Gwen Hayes is the romance equivalent to plotting books such as Blake Snyder’s Save the Cat and Larry Brook’s Story Engineering. Here’s the blurb: What makes a romance novel […]

Amazon Ad vs. Facebook Ad: A real life comparison

Amazon Ad vs. Facebook Ad: A real life comparison

Faceoff:Amazon vs. Facebook ads Last weekend I ran a 99¢ special on my book, Your Novel This Month as part of the Prep_tober kickoff for NaNoWriMo. Since I have no mailing list and a small website following, I knew that I would need to pay […]

Staying Productive-IWSG

Staying Productive-IWSG

ISWG Time Again

This post is part of the Insecure Writers Support Group Blog Hop.

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The awesome co-hosts for the October 3 posting of the IWSG are Dolorah @ Book Lover,Christopher D. Votey, Tanya Miranda, and Chemist Ken!

October 3 question – How do major life events affect your writing? Has writing ever helped you through something?


The only major life event to really affect my writing was my then 2yo daughter’s decision that she could not go to sleep unless mommy was in the room with her. This resulted in me taking my laptop into her room every night and typing away until she fell asleep.

I have never been so productive in my life.

There is a reason all the advice blogs suggest finding a dedicated writing time and sticking to it. Making writing a priority can be so difficult, especially if it isn’t paying the bills. But this arrangement meant that I couldn’t skip it. My daughter went to bed every night no matter what else was happening in my life. She wasn’t going to sleep unless I was in the room with her, and she needed to go to sleep.

Daily writing meant that writing got easier as well. Every time I take a break, the creative “muscles” in my brain start to atrophy. Writing gets harder and a lot less fun. But still I keep finding excuses.

My latest motivational force is my writing partner. We have decided against all good advice to co-author a romance novel. And we are writing it in the same Scrivener file. This means that only one of us can have the document open at any given time. I write my scenes during “work” hours and she writes before and after her 9-5 job. While we are working from an outline, we cannot write in a vacuum. The previous material needs to exist for the sake of continuity. Every day we are accountable to each other to have our scenes finished. I cannot write the sequel unless my partner has finished the scene. If I don’t finish, it puts us both behind.

So far the system is working and our friendship is still intact. But the book is far from finished.

What do you do to stay productive? Let me know in the comments

Your Novel This Month on Sale

Your Novel This Month on Sale

If you haven’t picked up yor copy of Your Novel, This Month, this is the time

My Real-life Amazon Ad-authortoolbox

My Real-life Amazon Ad-authortoolbox

Is an Amazon Ad really worth the cost? A real life look at using Amazon sponsored ads to sell self-published books

NaNoWriMo Plot Point Scrivener Template

NaNoWriMo Plot Point Scrivener Template

The Manuscript Shredder’s NaNoWriMo Plot Point calendar is now a Scrivener template.

The plot point calendar I complied last November that also became the basis for my book Your Novel, This Month has gone through a few updates. Its second incarnation was as an excel spreadsheet created by author P.J. Friel (Thanks so much!) Get the Manuscript Shredder NaNoWriMo Calendar here This spreadsheet allows authors to make notes along side the plot points to keep their story on track. It also provides a place for authors to put in their own word count goals. This means that you can easily check your pacing in a longer or shorter works.

Now, I’ve moved those plot points into a Scrivener template so that authors no longer need to have separate programs but can keep all their notes in one place.

NaNoWriMo Plot Point Scrivener Template
Get the template here

The template was made in the previous version of Scrivener, but I have had it tested in the new version.

[UPDATE: I had a problem with Google drive adding an .xml extension to some users’ files. The file name is “NaNoWriMo Plot Point Template.scrivtemplate” If google adds .xml to your filename, just delete the extra extention and you are ready to go.]

How to import:

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Splash Screen

Open Scrivener. If the new project splash screen doesn’t open, go under File>New Project

On the splash screen go to Options>Import Templates

Find the template file and click ok

The Template should appear under the “Fiction” tab

Select NaNoWriMo Plot Point Template

Name your project and we are ready to go

Taking a look around


The notes from Novel Format are the same notes included with the standard Scrivener Template. Ignore those for now.

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Overview in corkboard mode

The Manuscript outline is divided into 5 categories. The first four are part of the standard plot point calendar. I have included a separate section for the Love interest because these are optional and their position within the outline is flexible. If you plan to have a love interest, move these scenes into the outline wherever you need them.

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My notes are only on the “Folder” level

The template is organized so that my notes are on the ‘folder” in the synopsis. This means they will appear in the outline as you are planning your scenes, but they will not appear anywhere in the complied document (even if you click the wrong tab) and you are free to make your notes in the scene synopsis.

In outline mode you can see the plot goal as you are trying to flesh out your scenes

When you compile, I suggest removing the section breaks and keeping the chapters. (Either rename them or, if you use numbers, remove the auto chapter counting when you compile.)

I hope this template makes planning your novel easier. Best of luck on your next project.

Have any good Scrivener tips? Add them in the comments.

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Monday Writing Roundup-August 20

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