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Beta readers: When to Ignore Them

Beta readers: When to Ignore Them

Having too many beta readers swamps the new writer with advice, and that isn’t always helpful. Don’t let beta feedback trap you in an endless editing loop. Learn to evaluate writing advice and take back control of your story.

Crafting your Inciting Incident NaNoWriMo day 5

Crafting your Inciting Incident NaNoWriMo day 5

The inciting incident is the event that forces the character to action. It is the one event that sets him on his path. Make sure yours is up to the task

Scene Planning Worksheet

Scene Planning Worksheet

Create better scenes with a scene planning worksheet

Thinking about winging it for NaNoWriMo? You could end up staring at a blank screen with nothing to show for it. Don’t sit down to a blank page; have a plan. Scene planning worksheets will give you a simple framework to brainstorm your ideas so you will know what to do with those precious minutes when you actually have time to write.

Every writer has a different process, but sitting down in front of a blinking cursor with no idea what you’re going to write is a fast-track to frustration. Unless you have practiced free-writing and are comfortable typing whatever comes into your head, trying to write without a plan will lead you to long hours and little productivity. For many people, there is nothing more paralyzing than a tiny blinking line.

What is a scene planning worksheet?

Free scene planning worksheet

Scene planning worksheets are outlines where writers can identify the key elements they want in their scenes. This will help ensure that scene have a purpose and are accomplishing story goals. Some of these elements include:

  1. Characters in the scene
  2. Settings
  3. Timeline
  4. POV character’s conflict/actions
  5. Antagonist’s actions/reactions
  6. Outcomes
  7. Character arc significance

Writing without specific goals can lead to scenes that do not serve the story and will eventually need to be edited out. 

How to use the worksheet

Click here to download the planning your scene worksheet

Scene planning worksheet

The First Page

The first element is deciding if you are writing a scene or a sequel

This is based on the book by Dwight Swain (affiliate link, but I highly recommend this book)

  1. Scene- Conflict oriented: shows the character’s goal, the conflict/antagonistic force preventing him from achieving that goal, and ends with a disaster/failure
  2. Sequel-Transition oriented: shows character’s reaction to the disaster, the character processing the implications of his dilemma, and finally making a decision on how to proceed

After you have made the first decision, fill in the motivation, conflict, and stakes.

The next section is for the character’s actions. This will give you a place to summarize your sequence. The worksheet has four steps, but you may need more or less. There is no wrong answer.

The last box is the results of the scene. Did the POV character reach her goal? Decide what changes as a result of the scene.

The second page

Scene planning worksheet2

If the conflict is resolved, follow the left column to increase the tension.

If the conflict is unresolved, follow the right column to raise the stakes.

Free-scene-planning-worksheet-www.themanuscriptshredder.comThis step is critical to keep the forward momentum going in your story. If the stakes remain unchanged, then essentially nothing has happened in your scene. A static story is a boring story. Consider the ticking clock analogy. Even if the stakes are “or he will die,” you must show that eventual consequence drawing near. Everytime you main character succeeds or fails, her problems need to only get worse. Keep this pattern up until the final battle.

Dark moment: this the hook that will get the reader to move on to the next chapter. This could be a sudden revelation or a last-minute bombshell. This will also set up the next scene or sequel in the sequence.

Tip: Make sure the previous scene/sequel leads logically into the next. A character who just found out her little sister was kidnapped isn’t going to go shoe shopping. The “disaster” is a scene sets up the “reaction” in the sequel and the “decision” in the sequel sets up the “goal” in the next scene. If you break this chain, your plot will feel disjointed.

Scene planning is another tool for writing

There are dozens of scene planning worksheets available online. If mine doesn’t work for you find one that does or create your own. The desire to write may be innate, but the ability must be learned. Finding your process will take time.

Try scene planning to make your writing process easier. You will write faster with better results, which means less editing later. Something every writer can appreciate.

How to avoid info dumping in dialogue

How to avoid info dumping in dialogue

Trying to sneak backstory into your dialogue rarely works. Fortunately, there is a better way

Most Common First Page Mistakes

Most Common First Page Mistakes

The first page is the introduction to your entire novel. Create an effective first page by avoiding these writing mistakes

Bad Writing Advice you should ignore

Bad Writing Advice you should ignore

There are thousands of writers who have blogs focused on writing. While much of it is useful, a few pieces of bad advice have gained popularity and keep showing up in my feed. Advice, that if taken literally, could ruin a perfectly good story. Watch out for these toxic writing rules.

Not all writing advice is good

Part 1- Removing specific words from your MS

Anyone who uses “always” or “never” in statements about writing are usually wrong. Exceptions are always available. And anyone who says you should blanket eliminate specific words or classes of words is simply wrong.

Bad advice: Use “find/replace” to eliminate “that” from your MS.

Poor ‘that.’ This little word is much abused.

Sometimes it is optional and can be kept or cut to improve readibility or cadence.

He also knows that I wouldn’t ask unless I had no choice.

In this example “that” is optional. The decision to keep or remove it belongs to the author.

Still confused? Grammar Girl explains when to leave out that.

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Sometimes “that” is absolutely necessary in the sentence. Removing it would change the sentence meaning.

That as a determiner

I never really knew hate until I met that woman.

That as a pronoun

That can’t be true.

Looking for more uses for “that?”

That in restrictive clauses

She ate the cupcake that I was saving for Julie.

Confused about that vs. which?

Better advice: Remove unnecessary instances of “that” if it improves readability and sentence cadence.

Another grossly misunderstood verb is ‘to be.’

Bad Advice: Is/Was indicates passive voice. Rewrite these sentences in active voice.

Is/was does not always indicate passive voice

I see this mistake at least once a week.

Passive voice is a sentence whose subject does not perform the action.

“John was attacked by wild dogs.” -passive. John is the subject, but the dogs are performing the action.

“Wild dogs attacked John.”– active. Dogs is the subject and the dogs are performing the action.

Is/was can also function as a linking verb

Ice cream is delicious.

You could change “is” to “tastes” but the function is still a linking verb and “Ice cream tastes delicious” will have a different voice. Since most people would use “is” in ordinary speech, simply swapping verbs might have unintended consequences.

Is/was can also indicate progressive tense.

The ice cream is melting on the counter.

Changing this to “The ice cream melted on the counter,” changes the meaning of the sentence. In the progressive tense, the ice cream is still in the process of melting.

Need more information about passive voice?

Better advice: Overuse of is/was can indicate too much telling or lack of action.

Bad advice: Never use adverbs

While most writers know that adverbs can indicate weak verbs, there are instances where adverbs are useful. These occur when the word a writer needs doesn’t exist or when a writer wishes to create a specific effect.

“Turns out your friend here is only mostly dead.” -William Goldman

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Better advice: Avoid adverbs when it results in better writing.

Part 2- Showing is “always” better than telling

Let’s see

“The Judgement” -Franz Kafka

It was a Sunday in the very height of spring. Georg Bendemann, a young merchant, was sitting in his own room on the first floor of one of a long row of small, ramshackle houses stretching beside the river which were scarcely distinguishable from each other except in height and coloring.

or from “The Country Doctor” -Franz Kafka

We were camping in the oasis. My companions were asleep.

These are two examples I found flipping through random pages in one book. Both these examples are almost pure telling. Kafka could have chosen to show birds chirping outside the window or trees laden with flowers. He could have written about the tent flapping in the dry breeze, or the snores of his companions, but instead, he chose a more simple approach. One that spends the least amount of time establishing a setting. Why? Because in these instances showing would have delayed the start of the real story. Rather than waste time on building a setting, Kafka used one line of clean telling to ground the reader so the real story could begin right away.

Telling becomes a problem when writers use it to skip over interesting details that the reader wants to know. It also creates distance between the reader and the character’s experience. Or it dumps piles of uninteresting backstory on readers.

Better advice: Showing is often better than telling

In many cases showing is preferred to telling, but the writer must use his/her best judgment to decide when telling better serves to story.

Want to know more about turning showing into telling?

Part 3- Alternatives to…

These lists are all over Pinterest. Usually, they are just masking another problem.

Alternatives to “Said”

Flashy dialogue tags are the worst. For nearly every instance where a dialogue tag is needed “said” will suffice. You want your dialogue tags to disappear on the page, not draw attention to themselves. Flashy tags pull attention away from your dialogue. This is not what you want.

The two primary tags are “said” and “asked.” These two will vanish on the page, and you never need to worry about overusing them.

The secondary list of acceptable dialogue tags contains words like shouted, whispered, mumbled, muttered, etc. Notice these are all things you can do while speaking. You can’t actually spit dialogue or hiss it. Using one from the secondary list is acceptable when the dialogue cannot carry the complete meaning alone. Consider:

“Jerk,” she said.
“Jerk,” she muttered.
“Jerk,” she shouted.

Here the true meaning of the dialogue isn’t conveyed without the tag. Notice how the tag changes that meaning.

Alternatives to “Look”

If you’re overusing look, simply changing the word to something else isn’t going to fix the problem. First you must identify the verb’s function.

Linking verb- She looked tired.
Overuse of looked in this context may indicate too much telling. Simply changing “looked” for “appeared” isn’t going to fix the problem. Instead, show the reader the visual clues the main character used to reach that conclusion. For example:

She rubbed her eyes with the back of her hands and yawned.

Action verb- She looked at him.
If you’re overusing looked in this context, then it has likely become a word crutch, or a meaningless beat in your dialogue. Decide why she is looking at him. What does she notice? If it’s important, focus on that, if it’s not, cut the line. When you are constructing your Motivation-Reaction units in dialogue, any part of the reaction can be the beat. This includes involuntary physical responses, internal thoughts, or physical movements.

Alternatives to “went”

Overuse of “went” likely indicates too much telling. If you are using it in a transition, you may not need it since you likely would have established where your characters were headed in the previous scene. Again, this is where context and intention matter. A thesaurus isn’t going to fix an underlying structural problem.

These are just a few examples of the worst offenders, but there are plenty of others on Pinterest. If you stumble across these lists, use your best judgment.

Bad writing advice

While most writing bloggers have good intentions, some are unwittingly giving out incorrect or incomplete advice. Anyone can publish on the internet. With any advice you read, make sure you verify it against trusted sources, test it out for yourself, and see if it works for you. Identify sites you trust and always use your best judgment.

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